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Aug. 5th, 2003 03:41 pmHmpf.
I need help.
Well, you all knew that, didn't you? But I've started to write a story with Sark and Sydney (I can't promise Sarkney, although that's the direction I'm planning to go), and it feels very flat to me. So instead of writing the whole story and fixing whatever's wrong with it, I'm going the instant-gratification route and posting the first chunk of it in hope that some not-so-gentle reader will tell me (a) if it really is as flat as I think it is and (b) if the problem is just Syd's narrative voice. It's perfectly possible that I just shouldn't write Sydney; certainly I wouldn't dare write her pre-missing time.
( untitled potential sarkney )
That wasn't the best way to introduce a fic, was it? But I'm ambivalent about this scene, and begging for criticism seems like a good idea.
I need help.
Well, you all knew that, didn't you? But I've started to write a story with Sark and Sydney (I can't promise Sarkney, although that's the direction I'm planning to go), and it feels very flat to me. So instead of writing the whole story and fixing whatever's wrong with it, I'm going the instant-gratification route and posting the first chunk of it in hope that some not-so-gentle reader will tell me (a) if it really is as flat as I think it is and (b) if the problem is just Syd's narrative voice. It's perfectly possible that I just shouldn't write Sydney; certainly I wouldn't dare write her pre-missing time.
( untitled potential sarkney )
That wasn't the best way to introduce a fic, was it? But I'm ambivalent about this scene, and begging for criticism seems like a good idea.
