Here on a rec from hossgal, and I've been really enjoying this story. Some thoughts:
I didn't start saving bits to quote till midway through, but standout moment was the crew stepping between John and River, the way they all closed ranks at that moment.
"Cutting off heads sounds good to me," Dean says. "Slaying monsters is the family business. When we cut off heads, they stay off."
For some reason, that last line gives me terrible giggles.
And this Mal Reynolds doesn't seem to know how lucky he is to have John Winchester come and explain what he has in mind 'stead of just turning up on another man's ship and shouting orders.
Oh, Dean has a thing or two to learn about Mal. Can't wait till he does.
"I don't give up at all," Mal says.
Oh, Mal. He really is one of those people you just can't kill with a meat-axe.
...and he spares a curse for the cockblocking ways of younger siblings everywhere.
Hee!
Dean looks from River to Simon. "I think I've just been had."
Hee. Damned straight, and nice to see River give Dean a little comeuppance.
"Don't know about your old man," Jayne says, "but captain's plans don't always go all smooth-like."
Dean takes the grenades. "I hear you."
These two are so perfect for a little male bonding.
"Looks like a two-person job," Mal says. Lot of precise timing, from what he saw.
Winchester looks away. "I'll manage it. You two go find Sam and Simon."
Right there? very nice illustration of the difference between Mal and John.
"Nothing we couldn't handle," he reassures her. "Don't they need you on Serenity?"
"She'll fly without me," Zoe says. "Thought you might like the company, on the way to the rendezvous."
This one bit didn't read quite right to me--I don't think Zoe has it in her to leave Mal like that, even for a short trip, even for someone she's beginning to care about. Mal's been all that Zoe has for far too long.
Anyway, really enjoyable story--I really admire the way you write action, since I'm terrible at it myself. Will there be any more?
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Date: 2007-01-17 10:51 pm (UTC)I didn't start saving bits to quote till midway through, but standout moment was the crew stepping between John and River, the way they all closed ranks at that moment.
"Cutting off heads sounds good to me," Dean says. "Slaying monsters is the family business. When we cut off heads, they stay off."
For some reason, that last line gives me terrible giggles.
And this Mal Reynolds doesn't seem to know how lucky he is to have John Winchester come and explain what he has in mind 'stead of just turning up on another man's ship and shouting orders.
Oh, Dean has a thing or two to learn about Mal. Can't wait till he does.
"I don't give up at all," Mal says.
Oh, Mal. He really is one of those people you just can't kill with a meat-axe.
...and he spares a curse for the cockblocking ways of younger siblings everywhere.
Hee!
Dean looks from River to Simon. "I think I've just been had."
Hee. Damned straight, and nice to see River give Dean a little comeuppance.
"Don't know about your old man," Jayne says, "but captain's plans don't always go all smooth-like."
Dean takes the grenades. "I hear you."
These two are so perfect for a little male bonding.
"Looks like a two-person job," Mal says. Lot of precise timing, from what he saw.
Winchester looks away. "I'll manage it. You two go find Sam and Simon."
Right there? very nice illustration of the difference between Mal and John.
"Nothing we couldn't handle," he reassures her. "Don't they need you on Serenity?"
"She'll fly without me," Zoe says. "Thought you might like the company, on the way to the rendezvous."
This one bit didn't read quite right to me--I don't think Zoe has it in her to leave Mal like that, even for a short trip, even for someone she's beginning to care about. Mal's been all that Zoe has for far too long.
Anyway, really enjoyable story--I really admire the way you write action, since I'm terrible at it myself. Will there be any more?