Wow, this was a really brilliant concept and you wrote it very effectively too. All these moments in Fred’s life, searching for some kind of escape or release. It’s very much that way when you’re unsettled, when you don’t know what you want. I love this bit: There was some piece missing, and she couldn't find out what it was. She thought that it might be because her eyes were too full of everything else, so here she was, just water and sky and clouds shading orange to gray. Lovely way to tie in what she’s feeling with the things around her (which you also did very nicely in Part 3 when she finds the creek). Have to also admit that I quite like Gunn’s pragmatism too. Well done!
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Date: 2006-01-07 10:09 pm (UTC)I love this bit:
There was some piece missing, and she couldn't find out what it was. She thought that it might be because her eyes were too full of everything else, so here she was, just water and sky and clouds shading orange to gray.
Lovely way to tie in what she’s feeling with the things around her (which you also did very nicely in Part 3 when she finds the creek).
Have to also admit that I quite like Gunn’s pragmatism too.
Well done!