Ah, well, if I have your permission, you will be poked about this now and then ;) because I do like it very much, and you make the Winchesters fit so well within the Firefly universe, I just kick back and enjoy (well, yes, I'm selfish like that) ;)

I know I'm a bit lax when it comes to description, and I can't show much of what the characters are thinking here, because neither of them are terribly introspective.

It works really well, for me, it's all in those exchanges and it just works so very effectively :)

I am particularly taken with their last exchange, Zoe saying that Serenity is home, and John, John not having the courage to say 'it doesn't matter'. It's such a poignant moment, for the two of them and it moves them from 'I fancy you, wanna make out' to some other very interesting place.